you haven't mentioned anywhere on the flyer what Tim Hortons is doing, or even whether it's really affiliated with what's written on the flyer
unless you mention 'Tim Horton's' somewhere in the text, there's really no connection.
also, it's not really very apparent what the promotion is about. 'families in need' isn't very specific. explain your actions thoroughly
plus the timmy's logo is too small, and your choice of words really doesn't sound corporate, and that's a bad thing
'10% of any money you spend' should be more like '10% of all proceeds', and there should be some kind of date so people know from when to when their proceeds will be counted
otherwise it could be from year 1911 to 20,300, or anything at all
your text is also a bit difficult to read
it really isn't, but if you're going for as broad an audiance as possible, use a simpler font, you want to make sure there's no reason someone couldn't read it
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